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One-sided Heart by ~lostwriter1987:iconlostwriter1987:

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One-sided Heart

Your steadily beating heart
Echoes forever within
These shallow thoughts
As my vain love does nothing to
Fill the void

My blackened tears sting at
Each corner of my eyes
Smearing away the painted
Fraudulence left that
Concealed the forgotten bluest eye

My love for you can
Never be reciprocated
As I glare at your selfish silence
Will my very breath have no purpose
In this filth done wrong?

I guess only you hold
The very answers to our
Sad pathetic fate
You leave with that smirk knowing that
This world has gone to the crows

So as I lay awake
With the aching, yearning aura
Spreading among the bedspreads
I hope you see that my love still lingers
Between the shattered spirit
©2005-2009 ~lostwriter1987
:iconlostwriter1987:

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=The-Mirrorball-Man Sep 12, 2005, 10:04:59 PM
Hmmm... It's quite bitter and acerbic, yet not completely devoid of hope. Obviously, I can't give you an informed opinion since English is not my first language (and not even my second), but for what it's worth, I like it.
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~lostwriter1987 Sep 13, 2005, 8:15:40 AM
thanks :D you're really good at typing english for it being like your 3rd or fourth language :D

--
"Hate is just a kind of love you give to people who suck." :D
Novel WIP :writersblock:
Need a critique? :deviation:
:iconthe-mirrorball-man:
=The-Mirrorball-Man Sep 13, 2005, 8:33:26 AM
Thank you. It's my third language, but I did live in Boston for a couple of months. ;)
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~Runaway-Run Sep 13, 2005, 9:59:44 AM
I likes it a lot!!! SOO confusing yet i understand it. *bows to my idol!!*
:iconlostwriter1987:
~lostwriter1987 Sep 13, 2005, 6:53:20 PM
idol huh? :giggle: i guess i have a following now... :)

--
"Hate is just a kind of love you give to people who suck." :D
Novel WIP :writersblock:
Need a critique? :deviation:
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*OceanSama Sep 13, 2005, 10:12:24 PM
Very nice! If found this one a little confusing, but otherwise enjoyed it through and through.

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"All that is necessary for evil to succeed is for good men to do nothing."
-Edmund Burke

"If a man has done his best, what else is there?"
-General George S. Patton
:iconlostwriter1987:
~lostwriter1987 Sep 14, 2005, 4:43:05 PM
I think this one was just written in the spur of the moment so i think it won't make any sense... oh well....

thanks again :D

--
"Hate is just a kind of love you give to people who suck." :D
Novel WIP :writersblock:
Need a critique? :deviation:
:iconozzy0036:
~Ozzy0036 Sep 16, 2005, 6:25:52 AM
Well... This is little confusing, but understandable... I've felt that way, though... :+fav:
I love the way feelings make your poetry...
simple, yet so deep...
Keep on working my dear... ;)

--
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking weed. If you're one of them, copy & paste this in your signature.

WTF?
:iconvampirebutterflymel:
~VampireButterflyMel Sep 16, 2005, 9:17:21 AM
ooo this one's fantastic, I'm kind of at a loss for words... :+fave:

--
"Arguing on the internet is like running in the special olympics. Even if you win, you're still retarded"

RIP Steve Irwin :tears::rose:
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